エイゴ日記で上達してます!
エイゴで日記添削コースをとっているTさん。とても、上手なトピック&書き方だったので、本人の了解を得て、ご紹介しますね。*赤字はGinnyが添削した部分。「I didn't write in my diary. I was very busy in at the end of last year.To make matters worse , I entered the hospital for a heavybad/serious backache.I couldn't do anything to do. I lay without movementmoving.I had too much time on my hands.←good sentence!So, I watched many movies.Talking of movies, a movie starring Johnny Depp will be released soon.He is a great actor., And andhe is good-looking & hot.I like not only him ,(←×) but also a←×Tim Burton films.I'm looking forward to the release of the movie.I still have backache., Bbut it's not so bad.One of the causes of the pain seems to be a sudden gain in weight.So, I have to lose weight and build up my health.When I fall in love with someone, I can lose weight easily.I have not been crazy about someone lately.」どうでしょう?なかなかうまいし、おもしろいよね!?新しいダイエット法だし...彼女は、会話レッスン&私の文法クラスを受講されていて、楽しみながら一生懸命勉強してます。はじめて、1年たってないのに、こんな自然な文が書けるTさん、応援してるよ~!